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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four ASEAN countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four ASEAN countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 line graph illustrates the percentage of city dwellers
population
 in four ASEAN countries, including the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, between 1970 and 2020, with the expected
population
 in 2030 and 2040.
Overall
,
in
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 average it is seen that all four countries have an increasing trend in
population
, starting at the lowest point in 1970 and being estimated to reach its peak in 2040. Indonesia and Malaysia have a slight rise in
population
, respectively from about 12 to over 20 and from 30 to about 45 from 1970 to 1990, as well.
Furthermore
, the graphs of Indonesia and Malaysia have rapidly climbed until 2020.
Then
 it is predicted to continue ascending and will reach its highest peak in 2040.
On the other hand
, Thailand has had a gradual rise, which started from under 20 in 1970 and saw a slight change which
finally
 ended at 30 in 2020.
Likewise
, the Philippines
also
 showed the same trend as Thailand, which started at 30 in 1970 and had a slight
grow
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 in the next fifty years. Both countries are projected to escalate in
population
 in two decades.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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