The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009.
The bar chat illustrates the ratio of men and women educating in six different field of science in one of the UK universities in the year 2009.
Overall
, the biology and
the
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medicine
subject
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were the most attended among all students regardless of their
genders
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gender
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.
While
the number of male participants was much higher in the physics, females were stlightly more interested in the veterinary
medicine
compared to men. By
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way of comparison, the difference between the two
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the
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groups of sex
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not considerable in the contents of biology,
medicine
, and veterinary
medicine
. Being
populare
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popular
among
pupil
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,
biology
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type
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with more than 225 men and 200 women.
Although
the
audiance
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audience
of veterinary
medicine
were
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the least in
this
section of three, the number of ladies
were
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up to 110
and
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more than the
gentelmen
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gentlemen
participating in the same field of knowledge.
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