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The graph below gives information from 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030. The graph below gives information from 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030.

The graph below gives information from 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030. The graph below gives information from 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030.
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The graph shows information about the
energy
consumption
 in the USA since 2008 and its projections until 2030. The data was taken from a report in 2008, and it was measured in quadrillion units.
Overall
, there was an increase in fossil fuels and renewable
energy
 sources. The highest
energy
consumption
 was petrol and oil,
while
 the lowest hydropower source. Looking at the beginning of the period, in the 1980s, petrol and oil
consumption
 reached 35, which was the highest
consumption
, followed by natural gas with 20.
Additionally
 coal, as the third
consumption
 among fossil fuels, has a slightly over 15. Meanwhile, renewable
energy
 sources, namely, nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower, were under 5 of
energy
consumption
. Turning to the end of the period, the projection in the 2030s, petrol and oil will increase and reach 50 after a slight decrease in 1985. The coal is projected to make up 30
consumption
, which overlaps the natural gas (20).
In addition
, renewable
energy
 sources are projected to remain stable
in
Change the preposition
at
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 the end of the period with under 10 of
consumption
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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