The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
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provided bar graph illustrates the three categories namely
Agriculture
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,
Industry
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and
Services
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affecting
to
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India's gross domestic product in
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period
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the period
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from 1960
till
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to
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2000.
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, it is crystal clear that all of them underwent significant changes over the whole
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. Both the
Industry
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and
Services
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sectors are experiencing a drastic increase, the
agriculture
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sector on its term having the opposite trend and witnessing reduction. First
thing
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first the
Industry
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and
Services
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divisions are the ones that are having a growing pattern during the whole timeframe. The
Services
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sector
were encountering
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the
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significant rise throughout the years
and
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becoming
uppermost
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the most
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used one and
occupied
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occupying
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the top of the list. The
industry
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was having
noticeable
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a noticeable
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increase up to
1980
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the 1980
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year and standstill
at
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the same range up until the preliminary
period
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.
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both
other
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were having
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had
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positive momentum during the provided
period
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the
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agriculture
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was rapidly sliding down.
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the
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agriculture
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was the leading sector it became the second by 1990 and eventually the
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toward
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2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, industry, services, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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