The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
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India's GDP between 1960 and 2000. Looking at the
overall
structure, it is readily apparent that, the level of agriculture was observed a significant decrease despite being dominant at the beginning of the time, opposite was true services grew up sharply in spite of being the lowest point at the initial period.
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, industry remained more or less the same in a
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period.
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,
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agriculture was shown
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crucial part of India's economy till 1980,
however
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its points had almost tripled
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twenty years.
In contrast
, the service sector started with a peak level in GDP of about 20% from 1960 to 1980 ,
however
, its input climbed to over 40% in 2000,
that
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was shown
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most essential part of
economy
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.
In addition
, the amount of industry category increased gradually to 10% till 1980,
while
stabled at the same until the end of time.
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