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The graph belowe shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph belowe shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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The line graph illustrates
median
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the median
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carbon
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emissions
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 per individual in the United
Kingdom
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, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. The y-axis indicates
carbon
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emissions
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 in metric
tonnes
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while
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 the x-axis presents the years.
Overall
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, individuals in the United
Kingdom
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 emitted the highest levels of
carbon
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 dioxide between 1967 and 2007
whereas
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 Portugal had the least
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emissions
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 from 1967 up to 1987.
Carbon
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 dioxide
emissions
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 in Portugal increased significantly throughout the whole period . Portugal released an average of nearly 2 metric
tonnes
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 whilst the United
Kingdom
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 emitted just over 10 metric
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 in 1967. There was a significant rise in
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emissions
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 in Italy from slightly above 4 metric
tonnes
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 in 1967 to almost 6.1 metric
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 in 1977;
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, it remained stable between 1977 to 1989. The average
carbon
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 dioxide released in the United
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 fell slightly
overtime
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over time
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 and in
Sweden
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Sweden,
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 there was a rocket in
emissions
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 from well over 8 metric
tonnes
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 to about 10.9 metric
tonnes
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 in 1977 and
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 was
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followed
 by a plummet between 1977 and 1987 from 10.1 metric
tonnes
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 to almost 6
tonnes
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 .
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,
emissions
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 from Italy remained the same at nearly 8 metric
tonnes
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 between 1977 and 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, emissions, kingdom, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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