The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville.

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The two maps depict the changes in urban planning in the town of Kimsville in the period from 2002 to the present day.

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, Kimsville has undergone significant development and modernization, resulting in the addition of various new facilities.

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with, in 2002, trees on the north-west were cut down to make room for the construction of a new residential complex. Notably, the shopping centre in the north has remained unchanged.

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, a new train station has been introduced on the western side of the city

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the current map,

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the factory on the opposite side has been demolished and replaced by a software company. Looking at the southern part of town, the old cinema near the city centre has been renovated and converted into a pub.

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, the green space

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the south-west has been removed and replaced by a football stadium.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

145 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

residential development
transformation
industrial areas
housing estates
service-oriented economy
modern apartment complexes
amenities
transportation infrastructure
congestion
bicycle lanes
eco-friendly
accessibility
public spaces
recreational facilities
quality of life
vibrant community
leisure
exercise
social interaction
well-being

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The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville.

Some people believe that too much attention and too many sources are given to the protection of wild animals and wild birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Large members of visitors can endanger ancient archeological sites such as Machu Plcchu. In your opinion, is it more important to try to preserve such sites or allow public access to them?

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion