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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

A glance at the table provides the
sales
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 of a small restaurant located in a downtown business district in the
week
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 of October 7th to October 13th from Monday to Sunday and at lunchtime and dinner time.
Overall
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, dinner periods had better
sales
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amount
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 than lunch periods in the whole
week
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while
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 the total
sales
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amount
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 of
Friday
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 was the most in the given
week
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.
According to
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 the information shown in the table, the total
sales
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 on
Friday
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 were $6850 which was $ 2850 more than that of Sunday by $ 4000 which was the least in the
week
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.
Moreover
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, the dinner
sales
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 on
Friday
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 night were $ 4,350 which was the most in the seven nights
while
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 the lunch
sales
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 on Wednesday were the most in the same
week
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.
Furthermore
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, it can be apparently seen that the
sales
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amount
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 plummeted after
Friday
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 as the
sales
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amount
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 on Saturday was $ 2000 less than that on
Friday
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,
Besides
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,the trend kept decreasing which contributed to the poor
sales
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 on Sunday.
By contrast
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,the
sales
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amount
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 from Monday to Thursday was relatively stable.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, week, amount, friday with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuations
  • peak sales
  • troughs
  • seasonal adjustments
  • promotional impact
  • customer footfall
  • external factors
  • forecasting
  • performance analysis
  • trend analysis
  • sales metrics
  • business district
  • revenue streams
  • consumer behavior
  • market trends
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