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Band 5.5

You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, say what the problem is describe the accommodation you thought you were getting ask the provider to solve the problem

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my disappointment with the type of
accommodation
 provided by your institution. My name is Sameer Rana, an international student
I.D
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 number XX077, studying the fast-tracked English
programm
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program
 at
the
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Seneca College. From the beginning of the course, I
am
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finding
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found
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 it difficult to focus on my
study
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 because I have been provided a shared
accommodation
 with two
another
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other
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 students. My
roomates
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roommates
roommate
 stay up all
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night playing music,
video
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and video
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 games. The
cocophony
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cacophony
 makes it quixotic for me to study. The preeminent reason I
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 your college
because
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is because
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 a private
accommodation
 was included in the fees.
This
 forced me to proceed forward with your college. I expected it to be a small, private room where I
can
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 focus on
study
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studying
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 and
will
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apply
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live peacefully. At
last
, I want you to request
to
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you to
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 please arrange
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for me
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me
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apply
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an
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private
accommodation
 as soon as possible. I am attaching my
fees
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 receipt for your reference. As my request is urgent please give
this
 matter your immediate attention. Yours Faithfully, Sameer Rana.
Submitted by sameer.rn9596 on

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task achievement
Consider using more specific examples or elaborations on the accommodation issues for even clearer task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Review the use of complex words to ensure accuracy and avoid any potential confusion. For instance, 'cocophony' might be a typo for 'cacophony'.
coherence cohesion
Keep paragraphs focused, but also aim to link them more smoothly to enhance flow. Using transition words or phrases can help achieve this.
task achievement
You have effectively raised the complaint, outlined your expectations, and requested a resolution, which meets the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The letter follows a clear structure, with a proper greeting, development of the issue, and a closing that adds to its coherence and cohesion.
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