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The table below gives information about the amount of beef exported in five different countries in 2012,2014 and 2016.

The table below gives information about the amount of beef exported in five different countries in 2012,2014 and 2016.
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The presented illustration provides information about the sum of
beef
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 which was sent to
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other five countries
such
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 as Japan, Switzerland,
Brazil
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, Norway and Uruguay to be sold in 2012, 2014 and 2016. To commence with, in 2012,
meat
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the meat
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 of a cow which was transported to Japan was about 224 tonnes,
meanwhile
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 in
Switzerland
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Switzerland,
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 it was 23.
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,
Brazil
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 and Uruguay demonstrated a good amount of exports approximately 125,465 and 44,372 loads. In 2014,
country
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a country
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 which exported 130,307
of
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beef
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 was
Brazil
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, the meantime in Switzerland the number of
beef
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 which was sold
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decreased rather than
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 2 years from 23000 to 17000 kilograms.
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 in 2016, exported
beef
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 in Norway went down dramatically( from 81 to 17), meantime other 3 nations increased
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exportations
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exportation
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.
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, the highest result is shown by
Brazil
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every 2 years.
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, in 2014, when each country had a noticeable change, Uruguay and Switherland did not, even in 2016, Switherland decreased too much more.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, brazil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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