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The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides information about how much
oil
 consumption of four consumers, namely
USA
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the USA
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,
China
, Western
Europe
 &
Japan
, and the
Middle
 East between 2009 and 2030.
Overall
, there is a rise in the
figures
 for
oil
 expenditures in
China
 and the
Middle
 East throughout the period, with the decrease in the
figures
 for the
USA
 and Western
Europe
 &
Japan
.
In addition
, the
USA
 consistently has the fluctuation and highest
figures
 but
the
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a
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 dramatic decline in the
last
 two years. At the beginning of the period, in 2009, the number of the
USA
 citizens consuming
oil
 started at 9
millions
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million
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of
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barrels
 per
day
, after which it saw growth to 10
millions
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million
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barrels
 per
day
. The
figures
 for
China
 and the
Middle
 East saw a similar change, both increasing to a peak of just over 2
millions
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million
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barrels
 per
day
. Opposite changes can be seen in the
figures
 for Western
Europe
 &
Japan
people
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oil
 consumption
decline
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declined
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 to 3
millions
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million
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barrels
 per
day
. By 2025, the total utilization of
oil
 in the
USA
 is predicted to dramatically drop, reaching 8
millions
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million
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barrels
 per
day
.
Middle
 East people are expected to increase at the same rate, just over 3
millions
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million
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barrels
 per
day
 in the next five years. The
figures
 for
China
 and Western
Europe
 &
Japan
 will decrease to end at just under 4 and 2
millions
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million
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barrels
 of
oil
 per
day
 in 2030 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, usa, china, europe, japan, middle, figures, millions, barrels, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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