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The line graph below shows the number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city, by gender

The line graph below shows the number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city, by gender
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of subscribers of mobile phones by both male and female residents in Marycille
city
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 from 1995 to 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 women primarily subscribe in the first ten years.
However
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, they are surpassed by men in the second half of the period.
To begin
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 with, women started the period at roughly 600 and surged to 1500 in 2000,
consequently
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, it soared by 1000 which reached a peak at 2500 in 2005. After that, the
number
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 slightly dropped to approximately 2300 in 2010 and
then
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 hovered at the same
number
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 until the end of the period.
Additionally
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, the total of male subscribers began at exactly 500 before it dramatically increased to nearly 1300 in the year 2000. A noticeable jump to the same
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 of female subscribers, at 2500, was seen in 2005. Afterwards, it levelled off at
this
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 until in 2030, it gradually shot up to the highest point at 2700.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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