Some people think if students are afraid of the teacher it is better. Others see that having a friendly relations is better. what do you think? Discus both points and give us opinion.

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Certain folks believe that if
students
are scared of the
teacher
it is better. Others
also
support
a close relations
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close relations
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with the
teacher
is better.
First
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perspectives
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is some citizens prefer
students
afraid of their
teachers
because of the development of
respectful
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. Respect is an important
things
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thing
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that
students
must
to
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learn about, particularly to the
teachers
since
teachers
give them
a knowledge
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knowledge
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and full dedication to bring
human
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humans
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into
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their capability. In many
develop
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Asian countries
such
as Japan and Singapore, they implement
the
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character building in each school. Definitely, the purpose of
this
concept is to enhance their attitude during
the
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school time. Meanwhile, there is a
contrast
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opinion,
which
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students
incline
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are inclined
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to have an intimate
relation
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relationship
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with
teachers
to increase their communication. Communication is one of the essential things which humans need to connect with each other.
For instance
, there are some mental health cases that happen to young generations during their learning
progress
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process
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.
Thus
, to solve that problem,
students
need a
teacher
's role to discuss with. If the
students
comfort
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comforted
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with
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by
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their
teachers
,
then
they feel a
teacher
not
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is not
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only
a parents
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parents
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but
also
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a friends
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friends
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friend
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for
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apply
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them
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. In conclusion, the
teacher
's role both
a
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teacher
that
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can be afraid of and a
teacher
who can be colleagues
have
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advantages and disadvantages which can lead
a
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positive and negative impact since
that
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teachers
must consider their position with
diversity
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the diversity
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of
students
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students'
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character to make a
well
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good
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bonding with them.
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