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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The image depicts the procedure of hydroelectric power generation within a facility for the production of electricity.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 the cycle consists of three distinct phases, commencing with
water
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 from the river flow to the high-level reservoir and progressing towards powering the generator through turbines.
Initially
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water-fueled
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water fueled
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 by the river will gather in a high-level reservoir and intake passed the dam. During the day, the dam opens, and the flow of
water
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 operates the generator by reversible turbines.
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, the generator will generate power lines and connect to the national grid.
Conversely
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, when night comes, the turbines will pump
water
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 from the low level to a high-level reservoir. It will continue to rise and flow
water
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 during pumping.
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, at the moment, the dam closes so that the power is incapable of lighting up. In conclusion, hydroelectricity only works during the day by delivering
water
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 from a higher place and draining
water
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 from lower elevations at night.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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