The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line chart compares the
number
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of
shops
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that opened and closed in a country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the
number
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of
shops
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that opened and closed showed dramatic fluctuations over the 8-year period.
While
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more
shops
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opened than closed in 2011,
this
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trend reversed by 2018.
Initially
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, approximately 8500
shops
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opened. The
number
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of new openings experienced dramatic changes, decreasing from 4000 in 2012 to 6000 in 2014,
while
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the
number
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of closures saw relatively minor changes, ranging from 6000 to 7000.
However
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, the
number
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of closures dropped significantly to fewer than 1000 in 2015 but
then
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surged to 6000 in 2016, surpassing the
number
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of operating
shops
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.
This
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figure remained stable from 2016 to 2018, with a total of 5000
shops
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.
Moreover
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, from 2014 to 2018, the
number
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of operating
shops
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decreased gradually to 4000
by
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in
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2015 and
then
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stabilized at
this
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level until it dropped again to 3000 in 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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