The pie charts illustrate the percentage of energy generated from five different sources, namely Hydropower, Oil, Nuclear power, Coal, Natural gas, in a particular nation between 1983 and 2003
The pie chart depicts the proportion of energy
producted
from five unalike sources, hydropower, Correct your spelling
produced
oil
, nuclear, coal, natural
gas, in Correct word choice
and natural
a
same country from 1983 to 2003.
Correct article usage
the
Overall
, it is clearly appearent
, Correct your spelling
apparent
oil
Correct word choice
that oil
has
dominated in both years with Unnecessary verb
apply
the
ratio Correct article usage
a
around
38% whilst, other renewable Change preposition
of around
power
accounted least in the two diagrams.
To begin
with, the three biggest energy sources, oil
, natural gas, coal
with 42%, 26% and 22% respectively. Correct word choice
and coal
However
, oil
decreased it
proportion by 9%, coal saw a notable upwards Correct pronoun usage
its
with
5% and became Change preposition
by
second
highest energy source. Correct article usage
the second
Furthermore
, natural
had minor Replace the word
nature
fell
of 1%bin 1990.
The remaining two sources hydroelectric Replace the word
fall
power
and nuclear power
has
10%. Correct subject-verb agreement
have
Additionally
, nuclear power
steadily increase
Change the verb form
increases
with
5% and hydroelectric Change preposition
by
power
remain
Wrong verb form
remained
same
.Correct article usage
the same
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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