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The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are two bar charts that compare information about the percentage proportion of various released types of
films
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,
such
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 as
drama
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,
comedy
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, fantasy and
romance
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, and the quantity in percents of tickets, which were sold for each movie respectively in 1996 and 2006. The most remarkable fact about
this
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 comparison is that
drama
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 and
comedy
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 were the most popular
films
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 in considered years.
Additionally
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, the rest types of the movies were published less, than the aforementioned, and the realises collected less money. Looking at the details, the highest percentage of
films
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, that were shown in cinemas, was
drama
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 with 26 per
cent
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 in 1996 and 35 per
cent
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 in 2006.
Moreover
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,
romance
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 movies were in the bottom part of the list of released
films
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, with a mere 6 per
cent
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 of both. The percentages of
comedy
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 and fantasy were lower than
drama
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 but higher than
romance
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 in 1996 and 2006.
However
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, people preferred to watch
comedy
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 in these years more than other kinds of movies, with
the
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 proportion of around 20 and 23 per
cent
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. The worse sales took fantasy and
romance
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, a little bit over 7 per
cent
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 in both years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words films, drama, comedy, romance, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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