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You live on the fourth floor of a five-storey building which is not equipped with an elevator (lift). Write a letter to your neighbors and in your letter • introduce yourself • say what the problem is • ask the neighbors to agree on the installation of an elevator

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Dear Sir or Madam Hope you and your family doing great. Well, let me introduce
my self
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. I am Asilbek Saybnazarov your new neighbour, I live in a new house at Xudjaobod. I felt grateful for living in
this
 environment because it here the quietest place I ever had. Actually, I planned to invite my old friends because we have a long time no see.
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, I am thinking of having a party at my house, but I am worried about the sound produced. I would like to invite you and your
familly
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me and my old friends, I
also
 will invite another neighbour.
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you be able to introduce me to the neighbours. I can't wait to meet you and
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 neighbours. Yours faithfully, Saybnazarov Asilbek.
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Task Achievement
Ensure your letter addresses all parts of the task. The letter should focus on the problem related to the absence of an elevator and requesting neighbors' agreement for its installation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your ideas more logically and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea related to the topic. Avoid introducing irrelevant details such as a party invitation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a structure that clearly introduces your problem, proposes a solution, and concludes with a call to action or request for support.
Tone
Your greeting and closing are polite and appropriate, contributing to a suitable writing tone.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Introduce, rapport, difficulties, transport, groceries, furniture, accessibility, elderly, disabilities, benefits, installation, accessibility, property value, organizing, logistics, community, quality of life, support, impact, contribute, gauge interest
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