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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comaprisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comaprisions where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the
spenditure
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expenditure
 of
police
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the police
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 sector three of which are the salaries, the technology, and the building and transport expenses in
one
 of the areas of the UK
as well as
 the table provides some data about how
this
 budget
had been
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was
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 gathered from three different sources including the National Government, local taxes, and other sources
such
 as grants in the
years
 2017 and 2018.
Overall
, the main money provider in the table was the National Government in two
years
.
In addition
, the workers' salary was the highest cost of
this
 firm in both
years
 2017 and 2018. With regard to
table
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the table
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, the total
saving
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savings
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 of
police
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the police
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office
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officers
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 was about 304.7
million
pound
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pounds
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 which gradually increased and reached 318.6
million
pound
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pounds
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 after
one
 year.
Majority
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The majority
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of
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apply
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the
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apply
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of
This
 money
invested
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was invested
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 by the National Government , with 175.5
million
pound
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pounds
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 in 2017 and 177.8
million
pound
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pounds
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 in the year 2018. The costs, by the way of comparison,
dedicated
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are dedicated
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 to three segments
one
 of which had the
most
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highest
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 percentage among
others
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the others
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. Having 75% and 69% of the payments
constentively
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consecutively
constructively
constitutively
 in the
years
 2017 and 2018, officers and staff earnings
was
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were
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 the crucial
one
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ones
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 to mention.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words one, years, million, pound with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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