The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

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The presented pie graphs

ilustrate

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the distribution of median homestead

consuming

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in two observed years in the state.

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, the various utilization of domestic

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into six things

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as housing, food, health care, education, transportation, and other expenses. The patterns

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gradually changed

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the year of 1950s and 2010s.

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, the

accomodation

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accommodation

dominated the percentages at 72,1 % in 1950,

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nutriment came in

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second field at 11,2 %, and the other four filled the space.

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, the trends

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changed

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whole period.

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, the nourishment increased the ratio at 34 % in 2010.

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the lodging decreased

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22 %, in the reversal the mobilization

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14 %.

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the

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school and health protection

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in number. In conclusion, the charts showed the development of domestic expenses which made

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society more concerned about the eats than

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shelter in 2010,

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even though

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needs

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other goods had

growing

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in proportion.

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