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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares how much income
that
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apply
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US
households
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 earned yearly in 2007, 211 and 2015.
It is clear that
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 the population of people
earned
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who earned
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 annual income in the $100,000 or more
bracket
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 roughly
were
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was
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 the most in the three years,
while
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 there
are
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were
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 the least people
made
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who made
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 money in the $75,000-99,999
bracket
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. It is noticeable that
,
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apply
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around
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nearly 30
million
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of
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apply
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US
households
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 earned income above $100,000 in 2007 and in 2011, and it
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also
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is also
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 the only range that US
households
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 over 30
million
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 in 2015.
By contrast
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, the number of
households
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 stood
the
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at the
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 lowest point in the $75,000-99,999 money
bracket
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, at 14
million
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 in 2007, approximately 13
million
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 in 2011 and 15
million
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 in 2015. Looking at the chart in more detail, there is
similar
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a similar
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 number of
households
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 in the less than $25,000
bracket
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 and among
$
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the $
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25,000-$49,000
bracket
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, and the figure both ranged from 25
million
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 to 30
million
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.
Moreover
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, the figure for
$
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the $
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25,000-$49,000 is
little
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a little
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 higher than the figure for
less
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the less
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 than $25,000
bracket
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 in three different years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, bracket, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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