The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The flow chart below provides the fabricating operation for producing
sugar
from
sugar
canes
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cane
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Overall
,the process starts with a period of growing
sugar
cane
and ends with the
producing
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production
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of
sugar
.There are 7 stages involved
this
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procedure. The process begins with the growth of
sugar
cane
and it takes about 12-18 months.
Then
sugar
cane
will
harvest
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be harvested
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by
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with
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help
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the help
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of the technique and people .The
taken
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sugar
cane
after harvest will
crushing
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be crushed
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through
special
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a special
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machine and the result of
crushing
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the crushing
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will be
juice
.
Next
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The next
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step is
a
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apply
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purifying
juice
with the help of
limestone
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a limestone
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filter.The purified
juice
sends
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is sent
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to
evaporator
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an evaporator
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where
juice
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the juice
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becomes
a
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syrup
.
Following
this
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a
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syrup
goes to
centrifuge
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a centrifuge
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which
is contributes
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contributes
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to
separate
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separating
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sugar
from crystals from
syrup
. The
last
step will be drying and cooling the
syrup
resulting in the production of
sugar
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, cane, juice, syrup with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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