The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The flow chart below provides the fabricating operation for producing
sugar
from sugar
canes
Fix the agreement mistake
cane
Overall
,the process starts with a period of growing sugar
cane
and ends with the producing
of Replace the word
production
sugar
.There are 7 stages involved this
procedure.
The process begins with the growth of Change preposition
in this
sugar
cane
and it takes about 12-18 months.Then
sugar
cane
will harvest
Wrong verb form
be harvested
by
Change preposition
with
help
of the technique and people .The Add an article
the help
taken
Verb problem
apply
sugar
cane
after harvest will crushing
through Wrong verb form
be crushed
special
machine and the result of Add an article
a special
crushing
will be Correct article usage
the crushing
juice
.Next
step is Correct article usage
The next
a
purifying Correct article usage
apply
juice
with the help of limestone
filter.The purified Correct article usage
a limestone
juice
sends
to Wrong verb form
is sent
evaporator
where Correct article usage
an evaporator
juice
becomes Correct article usage
the juice
a
Correct article usage
apply
syrup
.Following
this
Add a comma
this,
a
Correct article usage
apply
syrup
goes to centrifuge
which Add an article
a centrifuge
is contributes
to Change the verb form
contributes
separate
Replace the word
separating
sugar
from crystals from syrup
.
The last
step will be drying and cooling the syrup
resulting in the production of sugar
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, cane, juice, syrup with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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