You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates.

Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information.

You should write at least 150 words.
The diagram illustrates the process of enrolment of high school graduates at university.
overall
, after sending the
application
forms to
admin
, 3 things can occur to students. Meanwhile, the whole process lasts more than four
week
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to be completed. First of all, the high school degree should be acquired,
application
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the application
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form that can be downloaded from the website should be completed and It should be sent to the
admin
. After that, students have three roads.
Firstly
, their
application
is rejected and
then
they can opt whether they want to complete an
application
for alternative courses or they want to cancel it
at
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all
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.
Secondly
, they are required to send more documentation and
then
they have two weeks to compile the
documentaion
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documentation
and make the
admin
aware of that.
Thirdly
, the
admin
accepts their requests and
then
they have two
week
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to get acceptance
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compete
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enrolment. After all
those
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stuff, they should select a subject, register with the dean and
finally
, they are welcomed to the university.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words application, admin with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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