Task 1: The charts below show the water levels of 6 cities in Australia in October 2009 and 2010.
The bar chart shows the water
levels
of 6 cities in Australia,namely :Darwin, Sydney
, Melbourne
, Brisbane, Perth and Canberra
.
Overall
, Sydney
showed the highest water levels
in October 2009,and Canberra
in 2010. So Melbourne
showed the lowest water levels
.
In particular
, at the beginning of the period
, Sydney
and Canberra
showed the highest trend in October 2009. Darwin, Brisbane and also
Perth index while
they the average level in period
. So Melbourne
illustrates the lowest trend in this
period
. Within a year Sydney
and Canberra
still show the highest level, But Perth is also
almost on a par with Sydney
and Canberra
. During this
period
Darwin vs Melbourne
showed the lowest levels
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