Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #research #organizations

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responsibilty

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responsibility

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investment and control over the

science based

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researsh

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research

should be on

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the governmnent

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governmnent

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government

rather than owned companies. I strongly disagree with

this

view because they only care about their

intrests

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interests

and force researchers to perform unethical experiments. But a private one can be more

benefitial

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beneficial

and set their

prioreties

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priorities

for good. Throughout history, nations cared about their own well-being only

due to

political issues or past feuds. They do not pay attention

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the harm they may cause in

this

process.

Hence

, if they were in charge of

such

studies, they

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certainly pressure their employees to switch their focus on destructive matters,

such

as weapons of mass destruction or bio-weapons in order to have an advantage.

For example

, a country like America has the

upper-hand

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compared to Afghanistan because of the

power-scale

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that their scientific team

provided

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In addition

, for them to reach their goal, they will spend people's taxes which they have hardly earned on unnecessary topics.

Instead

of developing medicine and

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for their own citizens.

On the other hand

, a private organization is under no influence, so they are free to focus on subjects which can come of aid.

Also

, they can go beyond their borders and help many people around the world without politics being involved.

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, the duty of

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studies can not be

exlusively

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exclusively

for governments, for they can act

inhumane

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towards other nations and forget what services they need to provide.

However

, private companies can act

rashionaly

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rationally

and cannot be

lead

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by a nation's

leadereship

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leadership

system, and can help all civilians.

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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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