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Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease, goverment showed focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
show
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should pay
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 attention to
decrease
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decreasing
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 the polluted
environment
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 and
properities
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property
problems
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 to avoid
disease
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outbreak
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outbreaks
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.
This
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agree
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 with the statement that illness and
disease
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 can be prevented
through
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by
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 reducing pollution and housing
problems
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due to
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 the places people live affect their
health
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 and the
environment
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 is the source of food and drink for people to consume.
Firstly
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, the place you live in has a big impact on your
health
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.
This
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 is true
,
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because it is the place where you mostly stay in , as it is full of dust , you may have
problems
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 with
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your lung
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lung
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lungs
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 and breathing.
Morever
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Moreover
, the
atsmosphere
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atmosphere
 and
behavior
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behaviour
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 of
resident
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residents
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 have more
variant
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variants
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 of
character
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the character
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.
Similar
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to
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apply
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that
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apply
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, if the place you live is wet and
fifthy
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thirsty
, you are likely to be infected by some
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disease
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diseases
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 be insects
such
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 as mosquitos
..
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.
...
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Thus
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, having a clean , comfortable working and living
environment
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 will help you to prevent
disease
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 or any other
health
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problems
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. Moving to
other point
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another point
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 that worth considering is
that
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apply
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saving the
environment
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 is saving the food and drink that you consume. It is a fact that all
the
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apply
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vegetable
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vegetables
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, meat , water,.. comes from
the
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apply
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nature
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 ,
due to
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 that, if the
nature
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 of
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environment
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the environment
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 is polluted , the
thing
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things
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 that you consume will be
unsafed
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unsaved
unsafe
safe
 as well.
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 , when you
littered
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litter
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 a plastic bag
to
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in
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 the ocean , the fish thinks it is food
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then
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and then
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eat
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eats
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 the bag, that fish may be eaten by many other
fishs
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fishes
fish
,
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however
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however,
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 the plastic bag will eventually go into our dishes as we consume
fishs
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fish
fishes
.
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 ,
the
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nature
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 is what we consume , so saving
nature
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 is the way to save ourselves from illness.
To conclude
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 , the
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government
goverment
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government
 shows focus on saving
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environment
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the environment
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 and housing
problems
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 is actually helpful for people in order to improve
your
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their
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health
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 and prevent
them
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apply
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from
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apply
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disease
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 and
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illness
illess
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illness
 because
of
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the
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apply
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nature
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 is what we rely on

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