Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

An

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amount of individuals

believes

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believe

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that preventing disease and

illness

should be faced

with

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by

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reducing the

pollutant

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pollutants

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from community and

house

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household

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wastes by the authorities. To

this

problem, the writer of

this

essay completely agrees that the

governments

should take

this

problem seriously with their own solutions. It can be considered that the

illness

mostly comes from

the

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pollution

as there are many types

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of effect

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effect

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effects

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to

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on

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human

which

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that

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the authorities need to take their hands in. As the

pollution

is increasing, the

governments

need to find more solutions to deal with it and

also

find another way to solve the housing problems

come

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that come

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from the citizens. In finding solutions, the

governments

could come up with many results

for example

the authorities could encourage the communities to join

up

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in

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the activities to reduce

the

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pollution

and the families to recycle the wastes they had used.

However

, preventing disease is not only by the

governments

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government

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it

also

by the consciousness of each person. If

people

do not have

their

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consciousness

on

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of

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the environment, they could make the

pollution

becomes

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become

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worse than ever as

this

could

do

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be

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more harmful to

people

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people's

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health.

As a result

,

this

could make more and more

people

turn into patients of

illness

,

make

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making

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the

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apply

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society

becomes

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become

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slow.

For example

, in

this

modern era, many

people

keep throwing trash

to

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at

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the public

as

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apply

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making the environment

goes

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apply

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worse

as

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apply

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this

make

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makes

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many innocents become unhealthy

turn

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and turn

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into patients. In conclusion,

this

is true that defending the

illness

and disease should

be focusing

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focus

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on lowering the

pollutant

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pollution

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of

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in

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environment

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the environment

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and problems from

housing

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the housing

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by

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apply

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governments

also

citizens need to help the

consciousness

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conscious

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on

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of

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the

pollution

around them

as helping

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to help

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their health to not be bad.