In many countries crime rates among teenagers are higher than among other groups.What are the causes for this problem and what can be done to solve this?

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youth
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involved
in it rather than other age groups. The main thing is that juveniles do not aware
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wrong activities. There are various
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enchaning it which I will explain in the upcoming paragraphs with solutions. To start with, most
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teenagers are unaware
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crime and they like to watch
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. The main reason
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utterly wrong for them because they do not understand
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reality. The second reason is that
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they want to give them
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life to their
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children
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to earn
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money.
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university in 2015 that the
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occupied
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children
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anything after
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school
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among youngsters than other groups.
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to solve
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it. First and foremost
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school system could help
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them because they
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most of
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in school so teachers should give them knowledge about
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things
as well as
parents
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to their children with their work. To illustrate,
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are playing
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important
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role in
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lives
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because
they learn everything like good and bad things from them.
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better in their lives. In conclusion,
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should ban
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movies which
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crime because youngsters learn bad things from
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.
Also
,
parents
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money for them but if their children
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gone
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path
then
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it
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