The line graph below shows the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers.

The line graph below shows the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers.
The chart compares 3 types of fast food in
term
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to
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how many
times
were eaten in Australia between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
, the three figures changed in different trends by
this
period.
while
the number of hamburgers, fish and chips grew quickly, the proportion of pizza fell sharply.
According to
the line
graph
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the number of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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was around 10
times
in 1975, the next decade it increased sharply to around 81
times
and continued
slightly
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growth to exactly 100
times
till 2000. Regarding fish and
chips's
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sales, the figure in 1975
it
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was just over 5
times
after it experienced rapidly rose to about 81
times
in 1995.
Afterward
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, it stayed stable over 80
times
from 1995 to 2000.
By contrast
, the sales of pizza experienced
an
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decrease in 25 years. In 1975, exactly 100
times
were eaten, but
this
number fell to about 81
times
in 1980.
Then
in 1985 followed by
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increase to around 90
times
and declined sharply to below 40
times
next 15 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words times with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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