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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter, explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir, I am writing to you to enquire
on
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 the recent advert published
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 the local
news paper
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newspaper
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 seeking
for
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voluntary workers.
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 I am
student
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 studying at university, as I am on my summer vacation I have been seeking a similar opportunity, which would be beneficial for me
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 ways including that I would be able to add
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voluntary work
on
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to my resume for future
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. I would believe that my knowledge in documentation archival and
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 management would be of use if you are willing to take me, and at the same time as I am very keen on learning
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 I would
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 enjoy the same. Currently, as I mentioned I am on my summer vacation
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, I am
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available
 for work for
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 6 weeks from Monday to Friday at the usual operating hours of the museum. I would appreciate
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that
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 you would consider me as a candidate for the said vacancy. Yours sincerely, Sam Donald.

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greeting and closing
Consider using a more formal greeting, such as 'Dear Director' or 'Dear Museum Director', to match the formality of the situation.
task achievement
Add more specific examples or details about your skills in documentation archival and database management to clearly demonstrate how your expertise aligns with the museum's needs.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your letter flows smoothly by connecting your paragraphs with cohesive devices like transitional phrases or signposting. This will help your reader follow your line of reasoning more closely.
task achievement
You made a clear statement of intent at the beginning of your letter, which is excellent for clarity and directness.
greeting and closing
You have correctly included a closing salutation, which is good for maintaining the appropriate formal tone.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Volunteer
  • Part-time
  • Unpaid work
  • Museum director
  • Skills and qualities
  • Customer service
  • Organization
  • Team player
  • Flexible
  • Reliable
  • Positive attitude
  • Availability
  • Professional goals
  • Community contribution
  • References
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