Some people think that the role of parents is to discipline their children and teach them about right and wrong. Other people consider that the main responsibility of parents is to nurture their children and provide them with a safe environment to grow up in. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Parental scope of responsibilities has been a debatable topic for years.
While
some people argue that
parents
have the responsibility to educate their
children
on moral sense and norms in society, others claim that parental responsibility is confined to providing a safe home and
unbringing
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bringing
their
children
.
This
essay discusses both points of view and states my opinion as well.
To begin
with, some think that
parents
should just focus on supplying some basic needs
such
as food, shelter and love.
Due to
cultural differences, people may have different definitions of
right
and wrong. Taking individualism and
collectivism
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culture as an example, in some countries
such
as the USA, it is
right
to prioritise personal goals over those of the
group's
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.
Additionally
, religious norms play a significant role in shaping cultural perceptions of
right
and wrong.
For instance
, in Islamic countries, consuming alcohol is considered sinful,
whereas
in non-Islamic countries
this
practice is widely accepted.
On the other hand
, a large number of people claim that
parents
should take on the responsibility to teach their
children
about
right
and wrong.
Children
begin to learn from a very young age prior to school age and
adapt
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moral principles from the environment.
For example
, a child at the age of four will adapt to the habit of lying, unless the parent does not tell them about it's
inappropracy
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inappropriate
. In summary, there has always been controversy about parental responsibilities. Individuals
holds
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different
perspective
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if it is the parent’s duty to provide their child with education about conscience. I believe
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that coupled
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with the educational system,
parents
should undertake charges to talk to their
children
about
right
and wrong.
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Aim to balance the depth of discussion between both viewpoints before concluding to strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to enhance cohesion.
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Try to include more specific examples or evidence to support each viewpoint for a stronger argument.
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Effectively introduced and concluded the essay, clearly presenting your viewpoint.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay showed a good logical structure, moving smoothly from one idea to the next.
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You effectively discussed both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the topic.
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