Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -Say how important new year is to people in your country -Describe how new year is celebrated in your country -Explain what you like about new year celebrations in your country.

Dear Abhay, It’s great to hear from you and your project is very interesting. I’d like to tell you about Nav-varsh, which is the
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new year, celebrated in India. Nav-varsh marks the beginning of
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year here. It is the most
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event, held the
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after Diwali. We have a public holiday on
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as it is the biggest festival in my country. The fest starts with wearing new clothes and visiting a temple. The loved ones unite on
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and convey good wishes to one another. We visit our relatives and share
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with them as well. Our homes are decorated with
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and the
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of the family
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to cook various traditional dishes. Loved ones enjoy a family dinner in the evening and the
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ends with lighting the
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. The best part that I cherish about nav-varsh is that the near and dear ones unite and wish each other good health and well-being. One gets love, blessings and gifts from elders and the atmosphere is filled with joy. I hope that helps. Do ask if there’s anything else you’d like to know. Yours lovingly, Nirav.
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coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing to link ideas across the letter more effectively.
task achievement
The letter effectively addresses the prompts around the importance, celebration, and personal enjoyment of New Year in your country.
coherence cohesion
Good use of paragraphs and clear progression of ideas throughout the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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