Nowadays many people chose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

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There is a trend these days for individuals to opt for self-employment
instead
of being an employee in an organization mainly because of the flexible work routine and in order to avoid strict rules.
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it has some merits, there are many drawbacks as well including a sedentary lifestyle and lack of incentives in the job. On the one hand, there are many folks who prefer to be independent in their work schedule, so that, they can plan things
according to
their own choice.
For example
, when we slept late at night after attending a function, my brother who is a
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had adequate sleep overnight, as he had the liberty to wake up late in the morning to start his routine.
In addition
, some people don't want to take orders from a boss.They want freedom from
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regulations that accompany an office job.To illustrate
this
, my cousin who was an assistant manager in a bank used to get written warnings from his superior on almost
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basis for not finishing the tasks
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time or coming late in the morning.He
finally
had to quit the post and start doing his own business.
On the other hand
, there is a tendency for self-occupied people to be lazy and lethargic.When no one is there to keep a check on them, they tend to be less active and energetic, which can lead to multiple health problems.One of my
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, who runs a shop of his own in the city centre has gained so much
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after prolonged sitting that he can hardly manage to move around.
Also
, he has developed diabetes and hypertension because of obesity.
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independent workers cannot enjoy the perks and
previleges
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privileges
offered by an institution.Many organizations like
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of Pakistan provide health, insurance and recreational packages for the welfare of employees and their families.
Furthermore
,
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cannot afford to be away from their work for
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duration
due to
financial constraints.
On the contrary
, the salaried
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class
can avail many months of paid leave for their private affairs.My colleague in a government hospital goes on a recreational leave every two
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to spend quality time with his family. In conclusion,
although
the decision to remain independent in the job has few advantages including liberty of activities and timings, it has many demerits comprising
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unhealthy habits and a lack of motivation in their profession.
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