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The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The chart depicts the dispensation of various salary categories in towns and territories of Australia.
Overall
, it is clearly apparent, that in town places middle-class Pipils are being more categorized,
while
 in regional centre
areas
 Lower middle-class Pipils have the highest population.
To begin
 with, in Town
areas
, more or less than 35% of people have
Middle-class
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 income which is around ($70,000-$120,000),
while
 in other territories Australian people have
an
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apply
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around 27% of the portion.
However
, it is concluded that in
Cities
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 places there were only 30% Lower middle-class
Pipils
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Pipelines
 specified ($40,000-$70,000)
Furthermore
, in regional centres approximately 34% of residents are being prioritised with Lower middle-class income.
In addition
, in urban
areas
, 20% of citizens have a high salary which is around ($120,000 or more) and more than 14% in local
areas
, The lowest income was accounted for in cities places of Australia with a ratio of around 13% and in urban
areas
 it was located just below the quarter an around 22%
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