The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gave us a comparison between the years 1950, 2007 and 2050 in the
differents
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different
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continents where it shows how the
population
has been growing during
the
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that
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time. All the locations have the same
behavior
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behaviour
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in order that,
population
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the population
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in urban
areas
have grown through the years. During 1950 the society was less
compare
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the
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other years, Africa had the smallest
population
with 17% compared to North
America
which for the same year had 64%. For 2007
population
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the population
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in all the locations experienced a paramount
incresing
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increasing
especially
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, especially
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in Europe where the society in urban
areas
was 72% very
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to North
America
, Latin
America
and Oceania.
At the end
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in
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2050, the chart shows that people will be growing exponentially
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apply
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in
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which case is predominant to
enphasis
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emphasis
in Africa's and Asia's growth where they had 62% and 66%,
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this
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both continents
had
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have
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experienced
the
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a
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major
incresing
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increase
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in
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for
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in
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population
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the population
a population
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in urban
areas
in
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front
fronto
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front
of North
america
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America
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,
europe
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Europe
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, latin
america
and
oceania
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Oceania
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which always had
very
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a very
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big
population
in urban
areas
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, areas, america with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban areas
  • population density
  • economic development
  • historical urbanization
  • trends and outliers
  • urbanization levels
  • socio-economic implications
  • environmental impact
  • urban living
  • global trend
  • development strategies
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