The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.
The chart displays the
attendance
percentage of students attending four secondary school types from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
, apart from the community
schools
, other groups showed a declining trend over the ten-year period.
Moreover
, the
attendance
percentage in the community
schools
increased by more than double
while
it declined significantly in the voluntary-controlled
schools
.
According to
the table, the community
schools
were not very popular in 2000 with only 12 %
attendance
but there was a steep incline up to 32% in 2005 and in 2009 the figure reached more than double i.e. 58%.
Consequently
, in 2000, the voluntary controlled
schools
were the most popular amongst the four other
schools
with about 52% of
attendance
;
however
, it kept gradually declining in 2005 & 2009 with 38% and 20% respectively.
While
the grammar
schools
' noted 24%
attendance
in 2000, the percentage declined to almost half by 2009. Simultaneously, the specialist
schools
'
attendance
also
showed a downward trend but was insignificant as compared to
other
Correct article usage
the other
show examples
two
schools
because in 2000 the
attendance
was 12% and by 2009 it went down by only 2%.
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