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The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates data based on different
income
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 groups in various urban and rural
areas
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 of Australia.
Overall
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, there is a huge gap between the
middle
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 and the
low
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low-income
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income
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 earners in the city
areas
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 per year.
Similarly
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, the same trend is witnessed in the regional
areas
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 among those with lower
middle
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 and high
income
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 annually. In terms of low and lower
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middle
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middle-income
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income
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 earners, Regional
areas
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 have the highest figures of people in the lower
middle
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 class at 34% per annum.
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,
the
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city dwellers are reported to earn approximately 13%, which is almost triple the number of
the
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 rural counterparts. Looking specifically at those in the
middle
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 and high category of
income
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, urban regions outnumber the rural
areas
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 by more than double the figure, making it 35% of the total
earning
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earnings
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 all year round in comparison to a mere 15% of individuals working in regionals. Interestingly,
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middle salaried
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middle-salaried
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 people are the most popular in urban
areas
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 followed closely by those in the lower
middle
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 category of regional centres.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, areas, middle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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