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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages.If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and if so, how?

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 learning English is important for higher studies, most people can do without it.Efforts should be made to preserve the indigenous lingo of a community by making it a compulsory subject and promoting it through national
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, the whole curriculum of medical colleges and engineering universities of Pakistan is in English and those students who are not good at understanding it, face problems
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Task Achievement
Expand your essay to include both sides of the argument more comprehensively, ensuring you address how local languages can be preserved and the importance of English.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include a conclusion to summarize your stance and the main points of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure smoother transitions between ideas for better flow and coherence.
Task Achievement
Your essay presents a balanced view, recognizing the importance of learning English as well as preserving local languages.
Task Achievement
Use of relevant examples, such as the curriculum in Pakistan, strengthens your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The organization of your essay around key points is effective in guiding the reader through your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • language revitalization
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