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The two graphs show the average hours of daily sunshine and temperature throughout the year in two cities in Australia.

The two graphs show the average hours of daily sunshine and temperature throughout the year in two cities in Australia.
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The charts illustrate how the average
hours
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 of
sunshine
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 and
temperature
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 change over one year in different Australian cities namely,
Melbourne
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 and
Darwin
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the rate of
temperature
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 in
Melbourne
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 is the highest in August, with
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Darwin’s
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 remaining unchanged over the year. Regarding the average
hours
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 of
sunshine
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, in both cities, the indicators remain approximately at the same level. Moving to a detailed analysis, in January the average
temperature
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 in
Darwin
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 is higher than in
Melbourne
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, representing 18
C
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 and 6
C
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. Over the next six months, the figure for
Melbourne
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 experiences an upward trend and reaches pique in July, with 18
C
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.
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, there is an increasing tendency in
temperature
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 rates in
Darwin
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 from January to August, peaking at 30
C
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. From August to December,
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Darwin’s
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 declines to 21
C
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, with
Melbourne
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’s seeing a decrease of 6
C
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at the end
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 of the year. Turning to average
hours
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 of
sunshine
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, the durations in
Melbourne
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 and
Darwin
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 indicate 10
hours
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 and 6
hours
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 respectively. In March, the gap between figures narrows, accounting for 8
hours
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. Between June and September, times level off, with
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Darwin’s
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 being approximately 12
hours
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 and
Melbourne
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’s being exactly 6
hours
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. Between November and December, the average
hours
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 of
sunshine
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 in both cities are equal again, at under 8
hours
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, before that of
Melbourne
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 returns to the same level and
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Darwin’s
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 decline to 8
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, sunshine, temperature, melbourne, darwin, darwin’s, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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