Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant places to live and work in. For this reason, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
Traffic
cogestions
has made urban Correct your spelling
congestion
congestions
areas
polluted and not suitable for living and working, there is a beliefe
that has mentioned private Correct your spelling
belief
cars
have to be eliminated from city
areas
. I think this
believe
cannot be helpful because a major Replace the word
belief
number
of big cities do not have enough foundation for carring
a Correct your spelling
carrying
caring
larg
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large
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
populatiuon
and it might cause Correct your spelling
population
sevreal
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several
problems
for citizens.
To begin
with, cars
have brought several advantageous
, Replace the word
advantages
such
as fast commuting and convenient transporting
, and Replace the word
transportation
this
method has made bond
to the Correct article usage
a bond
population
lives and it is hard to imagine a life without Change noun form
population's
cars
. Some assume that cuting
down Correct your spelling
cutting
access
of Correct article usage
the access
cars
to city
centers
may solve some Change the spelling
centres
congestions
, Fix the agreement mistake
congestion
although
, a significant number
of urban areas
do not have suitable infastractuer
for transporting all the Correct your spelling
infrastructure
population
and eliminating cars
from roads will brimg
other issues. Correct your spelling
bring
For instance
, rasht
,Change preposition
in rasht
city
that Correct article usage
the city
i
live in, the Change the capitalization
I
governments
replaced roads Fix the agreement mistake
government
by
walking ways for citizens Change preposition
with
and
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apply
this
method made
several traffic Verb problem
caused
problems
and caused long hours traffic
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of traffic
congestions
for Fix the agreement mistake
congestion
poeple
and it increased emissions and Correct your spelling
people
pollutions
.
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
Furthermore
, for those who living
Change the form of the verb
live
around
central Change preposition
in
areas
they need to be able to have access to their needs or for urgent needs , like sickness , and banning them from using their own cars
will make their lives more complecated
and they have to pay a significant amount of money for taxis. Correct your spelling
complicated
For example
, nowadays the amount of money we have to pay for taxi
is around 2 Add an article
a taxi
the taxi
dollors
per KM Correct your spelling
dollars
whereas
by our own vehicle
it will cost much lower.
On Add a comma
vehicle,
teh
Correct your spelling
the
other hand
, providing Change the wording
another hand
other hands
cleacn
Correct your spelling
clear
town
need some acts and banning Fix the agreement mistake
towns
cars
it
might be effective if all features and Correct pronoun usage
apply
occurrances
be predicted and the authorities should provide a Correct your spelling
occurrences
reasonablu
transportation system for the Correct your spelling
reasonable
reasonably
population
, however
, in most of the cities these options have not been provided and this
programm
will be a big issue.
in Correct your spelling
programme
conclusiom
, there is a Correct your spelling
conclusion
belife
that consider Correct your spelling
belief
eliminaiting
Correct your spelling
eliminating
cars
from roads will solve all Correct article usage
the city
city
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city's
problems
, however
, in my opinion, this
happening need a large number
of equipment and considaration
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consideration
also
if some habitats might face with
several Change preposition
apply
problems
and make the population
lives more complecated
.Correct your spelling
complicated
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