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Band 4.5

Excessive traffic has made cities unpleasant places to live and work in. For this reason, private cars should be completely banned from city centers. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traffic
cogestions
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congestion
congestions
 has made urban
areas
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 polluted and not suitable for living and working, there is a
beliefe
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belief
 that has mentioned private
cars
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 have to be eliminated from
city
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areas
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. I think
this
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believe
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belief
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 cannot be helpful because a major
number
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 of big cities do not have enough foundation for
carring
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carrying
caring
 a
larg
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large
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number of
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apply
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populatiuon
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population
 and it might cause
sevreal
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several
problems
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 for citizens.
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 with,
cars
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 have brought several
advantageous
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advantages
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,
such
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 as fast commuting and convenient
transporting
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transportation
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, and
this
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 method has made
bond
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a bond
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 to the
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population
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population's
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 lives and it is hard to imagine a life without
cars
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. Some assume that
cuting
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cutting
 down
access
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the access
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 of
cars
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 to
city
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centers
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centres
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 may solve some
congestions
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congestion
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,
although
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 , a significant
number
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 of urban
areas
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 do not have suitable
infastractuer
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infrastructure
 for transporting all the
population
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 and eliminating
cars
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 from roads will
brimg
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bring
 other issues.
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,
rasht
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in rasht
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 ,
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city
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the city
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 that
i
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I
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 live in, the
governments
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government
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 replaced roads
by
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with
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 walking ways for citizens
and
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apply
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this
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 method
made
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caused
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 several traffic
problems
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 and caused long hours
traffic
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of traffic
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congestions
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congestion
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 for
poeple
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people
 and it increased emissions and
pollutions
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pollution
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.
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, for those who
living
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live
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around
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in
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 central
areas
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 they need to be able to have access to their needs or for urgent needs , like sickness , and banning them from using their own
cars
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 will make their lives more
complecated
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complicated
 and they have to pay a significant amount of money for taxis.
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 , nowadays the amount of money we have to pay for
taxi
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a taxi
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 is around 2
dollors
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dollars
 per KM
whereas
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 by our own
vehicle
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vehicle,
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 it will cost much lower. On
teh
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the
other hand
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another hand
other hands
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, providing
cleacn
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clear
town
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towns
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 need some acts and banning
cars
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it
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apply
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might be effective if all features and
occurrances
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occurrences
 be predicted and the authorities should provide a
reasonablu
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reasonable
reasonably
 transportation system for the
population
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 ,
however
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, in most of the cities these options have not been provided and
this
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programm
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programme
 will be a big issue. in
conclusiom
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conclusion
, there is a
belife
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belief
 that consider
eliminaiting
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eliminating
cars
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 from roads will solve all
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the city
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city
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city's
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problems
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 ,
however
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, in my opinion,
this
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 happening need a large
number
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 of equipment and
considaration
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consideration
also
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 if some habitats might face
with
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apply
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several
problems
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 and make the
population
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 lives more
complecated
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complicated
.

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Structure
Work on developing clearer and more structured paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea followed by supporting details.
Clarity
Try to focus on the clarity and comprehension of your ideas. Simplify complex sentences to improve clarity and make your argument more persuasive.
Examples
Include a wider range of relevant and specific examples to support your main points. This strengthens your argument and makes it more convincing.
Grammar
Review grammar and spelling to ensure your message is clearly understood. Frequent errors can distract from the strength of your argument.
Task Response
Be sure to fully address the question posed, making your position clear and discussing relevant arguments for and/or against the statement.
Understanding
You presented a perspective that acknowledges the complexity of completely banning cars from city centers, showing an understanding of the topic.
Example
You provided a personal example with your city, which helps to ground your argument in real-life experience.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emissions
  • Air pollution
  • Global warming
  • Noise pollution
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Public transportation
  • Green spaces
  • Urban residents
  • Enforcing the ban
  • Exceptions
  • Mental well-being
  • Healthier lifestyles
  • Local businesses
  • Tourism
  • Offset the need
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