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In the Future More People Will Choose to Go on Holiday in Their Own Country and Not Travel Abroad on Holiday. Do You Agree or Disagree?

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In general, most of the
country
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's interest rates increased recently. In the coming year, many humans will select to go on vacation in their own nation and not migrate to foreign on leave. In my opinion, people
travels
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 a lot to their own
country
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 on holidays. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the agreement of travelling to their
country
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. The main reason for my agreement is that domestic countries are cheaper than international ones. Because foreign has a high cost of living and loan percentage. So, It leads to up in interest price.
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, developed countries
such
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 as America, Canada and the UK have doubled their rate of interest. In
this
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 case, tourists avoid to go
this
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country
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.
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, international is not
comfort
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comfortable
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 for humans because
changes
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of changes
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 in language, food, climate and culture.
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, they may
be suffer
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be suffering
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 from several issues.
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,
while
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migrate
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migrating
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 to other
counties
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countries
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, it
take
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takes
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 much time
for
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to
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 transit.
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, recently I went to Sri Lanka by train. It took two days for transportation.
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,
mostly
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most
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 people get a short holiday. So, they move to
near
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a nearby
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 location for vacation time. Many beautiful
place
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places
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 are located in our
country
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 to visit. It’s a good choice for people can spend duration with family. In conclusion, I agree to travel people’s nation. Because they affect by community, place and the tradition by travel to abroad. They have to invest more
on
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in
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 transport, living
cost
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costs
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 and food
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migration
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migrating
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. So I suggest
to visit
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visiting
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 their own place on summer leave.

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Vocabulary
Try to diversify your vocabulary to better express your ideas and to avoid repetition. For example, use synonyms for commonly used words like 'country', 'holiday', and 'travel'.
Content Balance
In your essay, ensure to cover both sides of the argument briefly, even if you choose to agree or disagree. This presents a balanced view and shows your ability to consider various perspectives.
Grammar
Work on sentence structure to avoid run-on sentences and enhance clarity. Shorter, more precise sentences can often make your argument stronger and easier to follow.
Example Use
Use examples more effectively to support your main points. While you've included examples, adding more specific or varied examples can strengthen your argument.
Structure
Good structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Example Use
Effective use of a personal example to support your point.
Argument Clarity
Clear thesis statement and topic sentences that guide the reader through your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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