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The charts bellow show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts bellow show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The
charts
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 illustrate the percentage of the usage of water for
three
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 types of purposes in North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 .
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, most percentage of water was used for agriculture by South
America
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, Africa , Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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. Percentages between
forty eight
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 and
fifty
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fifty-three
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three
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 of water was consumed for industry. Domestic
use
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 was over ten
percent
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per cent
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 in
first
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the first
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three
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charts
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 and it was less than ten
percent
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per cent
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 in
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last
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the last
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three
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charts
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According to
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first
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the first
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three
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charts
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, domestic
use
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 was not as much as agricultural
use
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. Industrial
use
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 in North
America
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 and Europe
were
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was
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 approximately
same
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the same
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. Domestic uses in
first
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the first
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three
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charts
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 are close to each other.
According to
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last
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the last
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three
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charts
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,
other
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the other
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 two
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use
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uses
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 were not as popular as agricultural
use
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 and domestic uses in Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 are exactly
same
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the same
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. Industrial
use
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 was the least in Central
Asia
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 even though it was more than domestic
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 in
South East
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Southeast
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Asia
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words charts, three, america, asia, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Allocation
  • Sustainability
  • Efficiency
  • Industrialization
  • Domestic sector
  • Agricultural sector
  • Global trends
  • Water scarcity
  • Resource management
  • Technological innovations
  • Water recycling
  • Population growth
  • International cooperation
  • Water wastage
  • Sustainable practices
  • Water footprint
  • Resource allocation conflicts
  • Environmental impact
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