The charts bellow show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts bellow show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The
charts
illustrate the percentage of the usage of water for
three
types of purposes in North
America
, South
America
, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
.
Overall
, most percentage of water was used for agriculture by South
America
, Africa , Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
. Percentages between
forty eight
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and
fifty
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three
of water was consumed for industry. Domestic
use
was over ten
percent
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per cent
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in
first
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the first
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three
charts
and it was less than ten
percent
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per cent
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in
last
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the last
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three
charts
.
According to
first
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the first
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three
charts
, domestic
use
was not as much as agricultural
use
. Industrial
use
in North
America
and Europe
were
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was
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approximately
same
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the same
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. Domestic uses in
first
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the first
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three
charts
are close to each other.
According to
last
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the last
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three
charts
,
other
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two
use
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uses
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were not as popular as agricultural
use
and domestic uses in Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
are exactly
same
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the same
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. Industrial
use
was the least in Central
Asia
even though it was more than domestic
use
in
South East
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Southeast
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Asia
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words charts, three, america, asia, use with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Allocation
  • Sustainability
  • Efficiency
  • Industrialization
  • Domestic sector
  • Agricultural sector
  • Global trends
  • Water scarcity
  • Resource management
  • Technological innovations
  • Water recycling
  • Population growth
  • International cooperation
  • Water wastage
  • Sustainable practices
  • Water footprint
  • Resource allocation conflicts
  • Environmental impact
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