The graph shows the number of girls and boys playing sport in an English town in 2012

The graph shows the number of girls and boys playing sport in an English town in 2012
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The bar chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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of
boys
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and
girls
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who participated in six different types of sports activities, including tennis, badminton, cycling, swimming,
football
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and
hockey
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, in one of the English towns during 2022. In total, there were more
boys
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playing sports compared with
girls
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, with a total of 230
boys
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and 173
girls
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. All tennis, cycling,
football
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and
hockey
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had a larger number of boy participants,
while
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football
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shows a larger difference as
boys
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outweigh
girls
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with a number of 30. Opposite, there were more female participants in
both
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badminton and swimming,
both
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of them were 10 people higher than the
boys
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. Among all games,
boys
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have shown a higher interest in
football
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,
while
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most
girls
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preferred swimming, in which the percentage of participation is 21.7% and 28.9% of the population respectively.
Both
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boys
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and
girls
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had the least interest in
hockey
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, only 15
boys
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and 10
girls
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were playing with it.
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, there are more
guy
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guys
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doing sports than
girls
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in English towns in 2022,
while
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more
boys
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show a preference for soccer
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while
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apply
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more
girls
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enjoy swimming. At the same time,
both
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groups have lower motivation to play
hockey
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, football, hockey, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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