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The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates
expenditure
Correct article usage
the expenditure
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 of most Australian households per month in 1991 and 2001. It is estimated by
Australian
Add an article
the Australian
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 dollar.
Overall
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,
total
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a total
the total
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 number of
dollar
Fix the agreement mistake
dollars
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 spent
in
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on
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 expenditure for Australian
family
Fix the agreement mistake
families
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 had increased in number
whereas
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 in 1991 only about 675.
However
Linking Words
, there was
Correct article usage
a slightly
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slightly increased
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slight increase
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 in the
year
Use synonyms
of
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apply
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2001
where
Correct word choice
when
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 it ended up
in
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at
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 715.
In addition
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, there
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 an
increased
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increase
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 in several categories
such
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 as food, electricity and water, housing and
others good
Fix the agreement mistake
other goods
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.
Start
Wrong verb form
Starting
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 with food, it
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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a
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apply
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slightly rose from 155 to 160 in 2001, followed by electricity and water had roughly increased from 75 to 120 in the
year
Use synonyms
of
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apply
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2001.
Next,
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housing and other goods
were
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apply
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rose in number
whereas
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 both were 270 and 100 in 2001.
In
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On
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 the other hand,
few
Correct article usage
a few
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 categories
such
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 as clothing and transport,
both
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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had decreased in numbers for the
year
Use synonyms
of
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apply
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2021.
Furthermore
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, clothing was 30 in 1991 turn
into
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to
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 20 in 2001 and followed
with
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by
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 transport that fell
into
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to
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 45 which was 70 in the
year
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
apply
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1991.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • average family
  • significant changes
  • substantial increases
  • categories of expenditure
  • inflation
  • lifestyle changes
  • economic factors
  • cost of living
  • monthly expenditure
  • overall trend
  • comparisons
  • ten-year period
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