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The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates
expenditure
Correct article usage
the expenditure
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 of most Australian households per month in 1991 and 2001. It is estimated by
Australian
Add an article
the Australian
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 dollar.
Overall
,
total
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a total
the total
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 number of
dollar
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dollars
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 spent
in
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on
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 expenditure for Australian
family
Fix the agreement mistake
families
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 had increased in number
whereas
 in 1991 only about 675.
However
, there was
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a slightly
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slightly increased
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slight increase
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 in the
year
of
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apply
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2001
where
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when
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 it ended up
in
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at
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 715.
In addition
, there
were
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was
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 an
increased
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increase
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 in several categories
such
 as food, electricity and water, housing and
others good
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other goods
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.
Start
Wrong verb form
Starting
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 with food, it
had
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apply
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a
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apply
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slightly rose from 155 to 160 in 2001, followed by electricity and water had roughly increased from 75 to 120 in the
year
of
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apply
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2001.
Next,
housing and other goods
were
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apply
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rose in number
whereas
 both were 270 and 100 in 2001.
In
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On
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 the other hand,
few
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a few
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 categories
such
 as clothing and transport,
both
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apply
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had decreased in numbers for the
year
of
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apply
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2021.
Furthermore
, clothing was 30 in 1991 turn
into
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to
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 20 in 2001 and followed
with
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by
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 transport that fell
into
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to
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 45 which was 70 in the
year
of
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apply
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1991.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • average family
  • significant changes
  • substantial increases
  • categories of expenditure
  • inflation
  • lifestyle changes
  • economic factors
  • cost of living
  • monthly expenditure
  • overall trend
  • comparisons
  • ten-year period
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