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The graph shows the number of girls and boys playing sport in an English town in 2012

The graph shows the number of girls and boys playing sport in an English town in 2012
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The given bar graph compares how many
boys
 and
girls
 practice
sports
 in an English town in 2012.The graph indicates six different types of
sports
 ( tennis,
Badmenton
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Badminton
,
cyclying
Correct your spelling
cycling
, swimming, football and hockey).
Overall
, the
number
 of
boys
 who practice
sports
 is more than the
number
 of
girls
 in
m ost
Correct your spelling
most
show examples
of
Change preposition
apply
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sports
.
In addition
, the graph shows that football is
most
Rephrase
more
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 popular than any other sport for
boys
while
 swimming is more preferable than others for
grils
Correct your spelling
girls
. The
number
 of
boys
 who
playing
Wrong verb form
play
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 football
are
Change the verb form
is
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 60 which
represented
Wrong verb form
represents
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 the highest
number
 among the other
sports
.Comparing to
girls
 which is
third
Correct article usage
a third
show examples
 of
boys
 (20). Tennis is the second
popular
Correct quantifier usage
most popular
show examples
 game for
boys
 50.
While
 hockey attracted the lowest
number
 of
boys
 more than 10. Regarding
girls
, It is noticed that most
girls
 do swimming at 50.
Moreover
,
Badmenton
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Badminton
was the second choice for
girls
 at 40. Similar to
boys
 hockey is under 20 and showed the least
number
 .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, sports, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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