The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart illustrates data about the types of
profession
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professions
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in the United Kingdom
includes
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their salary. Meanwhile, the tables
provides
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the average working
on
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hours
for each
profession
in
a
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one week.
Overall
, the proportion of each
profession
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profession's
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salaries slightly increased after three years.
However
, the average number of working
hour
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hours
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for each
profession
were
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varied.
To begin
with, the salary of each
profession
had
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rose after three years
working
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of working
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. Starting with the police
where
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which
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begin
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began
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with almost 25000 and ended up
in
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with
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more than 25000. It
followed
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was followed
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by
the
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others,
such
as
nurse
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nurses
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which came from around 15000 to almost 20000. Altogether, there was a significant
increased
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in
Teacher
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Teachers
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,
Firefighter
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Firefighters
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and Underground
Driver
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Drivers
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whereas
at
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after
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three years
working
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of working
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those professions had reached
each
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apply
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to
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more than 30000.
In
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other
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the other
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hand, the number of working
hours
for all
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professions
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were
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was
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in the median of 45
hours
.
However
,
firefighter
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firefighters
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and
teacher
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teachers
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had the same number
working
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of working
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hours
which
is
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was
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55.
Furthermore
, the working
hours
of police
was
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were
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about 40
and
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apply
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followed by
nurse
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nurses
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and underground
driver
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drivers
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where each 38 and 36.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words profession, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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