The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Brazil’s economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
indicate
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the amount of five different industries'( finance, food processing, manufacturing,
toursim
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tourism
, and oil, coal and gas) from
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Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with apredication for the year 2029.
Overall
, food processing , fossil fuels,
toursim
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tourism
and manufacturing
indistries
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industries
are expected to decrease in the future and finance is the only industry that has a prediction to increase in the future. In 2009 , finance industries in Brazil
was
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represented more than 30% and increased to up 35% in 2019 with more expectation to reach a peak at more than 40%
for
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the
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Brazil's economy in 2029. The industry of fossil fuels
also
witnessed an increase to up
30
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% in 2019 and with
expectation
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the expectation
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to fall down to slightly more than 25% in 2019.
On the other hand
, Food processing
producation
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production
showed only 10% in 2009 and is expected to remain at the same level after 20 years
although
it
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doubled in 2019 to become more than 20%.
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to
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manufacturing
that
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showed a
dramatically
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decrease over
thegiven
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the given
period ( up 20%, up 15% respectively ) and will be under 5% in the future.
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