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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given diagram depicts the process, which is about how a hydroelectric
power
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 station produces electricity.
Overall
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, there are distinctive stages of
this
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 process during the
day
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 and
night
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. It starts with the
water
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 from the river, which is in a high-level
reservoir
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. The
water
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 will eventually find its way and go to the
power
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 station to light up the national grid.
First,
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the
water
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 from the river is reserved in a high-level
reservoir
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.
Second,
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we can see a dam which is opened during the
day
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 and closed at
night
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. Throughout the
day
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, after being flown, electricity is generated by
water
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,
while
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 at
night
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,
water
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 is flown through pumping.
Third,
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the generator is operated by reversible turbines in the
power
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 station.
Finally
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, the
power
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 produced by the generator will
power
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 the national grid through
power
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 lines. Throughout the
night
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, after being pumped by reversible turbines, the
water
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 goes into a high-level
reservoir
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,
while
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 during the
day
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 it goes into a low-level
reservoir
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, day, night, water, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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