Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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held belief that
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of advertising
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a huge respect among societies.
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commercials
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about distinct
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are compelling people to buy these.
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,there is debate over whether it is fruitful for those consumers who
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on these sources to
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is rare in
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becoming a controversial argument. In
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add on the
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buyers come to know about its functions and features.To put it simply,there
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detailed information about the items in its ads like what benefits customers have
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qualities so pupils can decide before spending their money on it.
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assistance in case
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there are some offers on
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like branded clothes,electronic appliances and so on.Because
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most
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the
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commuters refuse to spend on these luxury items
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expensiveness which
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them just dream about
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.
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, commercial in case of daily usage
products
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like tiny house appliances like fans, kitchen appliances and others would leads waste your time and money.
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, these
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usually folks have in their houses so ads on it can encourage them again buy with
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modern upgrade but it has
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funtionality
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functionality
as old ones.
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, the trend of
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advertisements
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confusing to decide on relevant ones as a
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customers cannot underestimate which
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have excessive durability. In
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conclude
, there is no doubt that advertising is a splendid way to introduce new
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in
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the market
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but, there would be some awareness among
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communities
about their positive and negative impacts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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