Nowadays in many countries young people have a hard time finding jobs. What are the causes of this and what could be the effects?

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Nowadays, in several countries, there is a phenomenon where young
people
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are having a hard time finding a stable
job
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. It is happening
as a result
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of less experienced young citizens and will lead to a
declined
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in
national
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the national
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economy.
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, lack of
experience
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is the main reason why the young
peoplepoople
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people people
are going through a hard time getting a
job
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.
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is because they are unable to
be
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quailfy
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qualify
in companies
,
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apply
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because each of the companies has certain
yearsa
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years
years a
certain years of
experience
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requirements for their possible employee. As the world
changing
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changes
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, the requirements even become more complex; undeniably, it is hard to achieve, even for
fresh-graduates
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fresh graduates
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.
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,
the
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fresh graduates,
they
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apply
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have no
job
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experience
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because they
are
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have
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just graduated and at the same time can not
applyapllied
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apply
for their first
job
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to gain more
experience
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. If
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trend continues, it will affect the country's economy as it requires the government to take a look
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the
unemploye’s
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employee’s
life.
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includes their daily need to survive, and even so, as the number of jobless
people
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isare
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is
still rising, it would be hard for the authorities to
accomodate
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accommodate
.
Moreover
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,
number
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a number
the number
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of
homelessness
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people
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would
be increasing
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and
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apply
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sometimes
can lead
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leading
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to higher crime rates.
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, if the number of young unemployed
keep
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keeps
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rising,
than
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then
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it could
make
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create
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a
chain-effect
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chain effect
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which can lead to
those
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apply
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serious problems. In conclusion, the main reason
for
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apply
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young
people
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are finding it harder to get
paid-jobs
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paid jobs
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it
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apply
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is because they have no
experiences
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experience
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to
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in
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fullfll
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fulfil
the
companies
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company's
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requirements. If
this
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case still continues, it can make an impact on the
countries
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country's
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economy and can lead to
another serious problems
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another serious problem
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in the future.
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