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The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the number of
energy
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 sources by Natural gas, coal,
hydrogen
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, Nuclear,
Oil
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, and other renewable
energy
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 in a country from 1985 to 2003. It is noticeable that the highest proportion of
energy
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production
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 is
oil
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.
By contrast
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,
Hydrogen
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 and other renewable
energy
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 has limited
energy
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production
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. In 1985, the majority of
energy
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production
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 in a country was
Oil
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 which is a half proportion of the
energy
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 produced in a country.
Furthermore
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, Nuclear
produce
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energy
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 22%, which
was
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is
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 the second largest
production
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.
In addition
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, Natural gas, Coal,
Hydrogen
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, and Other renewable
energy
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 produce
energy
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 under 15% of all
energy
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 produced, which are 13%, 8%, 4%, and 1%, respectively. In 2003, the
energy
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production
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 of
Oil
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 dropped to 39% which was a larger decrease than other
energy
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 resources.
Moreover
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, Nuclear
Production
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 slightly decreased to 17%.
However
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, the other proportion of
energy
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 produced
such
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 as Natural gas, Coal, and other renewable
energy
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 rose, which are 23%, 13%, and 4%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the number of
hydrogen
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 was steady at 4%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, hydrogen, oil, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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