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The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the number of
energy
 sources by Natural gas, coal,
hydrogen
, Nuclear,
Oil
, and other renewable
energy
 in a country from 1985 to 2003. It is noticeable that the highest proportion of
energy
production
 is
oil
.
By contrast
,
Hydrogen
 and other renewable
energy
 has limited
energy
production
. In 1985, the majority of
energy
production
 in a country was
Oil
 which is a half proportion of the
energy
 produced in a country.
Furthermore
, Nuclear
produce
Correct subject-verb agreement
produces
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energy
 22%, which
was
Wrong verb form
is
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 the second largest
production
.
In addition
, Natural gas, Coal,
Hydrogen
, and Other renewable
energy
 produce
energy
 under 15% of all
energy
 produced, which are 13%, 8%, 4%, and 1%, respectively. In 2003, the
energy
production
 of
Oil
 dropped to 39% which was a larger decrease than other
energy
 resources.
Moreover
, Nuclear
Production
 slightly decreased to 17%.
However
, the other proportion of
energy
 produced
such
 as Natural gas, Coal, and other renewable
energy
 rose, which are 23%, 13%, and 4%, respectively.
On the other hand
, the number of
hydrogen
 was steady at 4%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, hydrogen, oil, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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